Lead #1: Couple who suffered injuries in a traffic accident in March were awarded $150,000 in damages yesterday, at Butte County Court.
Lead #2: Snowstorm is just the beginning. Forecasters say the next of a series of snowstorms will hit the Sierras today.
Lead #3: Today a fire roared through a six-story building located at 204 Union Ave. Police say, while three firefighters were injured, 41 families were evacuated.
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1) Good, except it sounds like a headline. Just add an article and tighten it up a bit:
A couple injured in a March traffic accident was awarded $150,000 in damages yesterday at Butte County Court.
2) You're starting out with a headline again. Just cut your first sentence. (But remember this technique when we do broadcast -- it works there...just not for print.)
3) You've buried your lead. The news is not the fire itself, but that three firefighters were injured while evacuating 41 families from a burning building.
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